I would like to hear more fire at certain parts but I think the way you played was very nice. And dont worry, its not as messy as when I play it
A few tips
1) At 1:50, take a break! Its an end of a phrase so show that.
2) Use more slurs, it will make it alot easier on the right hand
3) More right hand movement (different textures). This can wait if your trying to get it technically perfect.
4) I personally prefer a thrashing loud ending to this piece. Going soft doesnt sound bad but I like to go out with a bang on this piece.
When I post this piece I better have some constructive comments from yourself :p